2008年12月25日 星期四

Beautiful Writing (好文共欣賞)!

L4 “I Can !” by Winny (欣賞本文的正確性與流暢度)
Kacey was a man who lost both his legs in an accident. He didn’t give up his dream — playing basketball on the team. Although he had no legs, he still could do many things as well as others people. He made his dream come true. He wasn’t the best player on the team, but he practiced very hard. He also could play the baseball well.

The author gave us some examples of physically challenged people. They weren’t healthy, but they were active. They didn’t let their problems stop them from doing anything that they wanted to do.

Where there is a will, there is a way. We can’t be afraid of anything and do things without perseverance. When you are having trouble next time, just say ‘you can!’ With strong perseverance and wills, you will achieve what you expect to do.

L3 “Three Steps to Success” by Claire (欣賞本文的流暢度)
J.K Rowling, she writes Horry potter. She was not rich before. While working as a teacher, she didn’t have classes in the morning, so she always used her free time to write novels. She really liked to write novels. Afterwards, she married and had one daughter. However, her marriage was not happy, so she got divorced and then brought up her daughter. Although she needed to raise her daughter, she never gave up writing novels. Every morning she went to a coffee shop to eat breakfast and wrote novels. When she finished her book, she tried to find publishers but didn’t have any one to help her. She never gave up. From door to door, she finally found one to help J.K Rowling to publish. This book was called Horry potter. Now J.K Rowling is successful. “Never give up” is why she succeeds. That teaches me a lot. Don’t give up and work hard, and success belongs to you. But if you never work hard, success does not belong to you forever.

Lesson 7 “Science in the Kitchen” by Winnie (欣賞本文的簡潔性)
Science is all around us. If we look something closely and maybe you can see the science that makes it work. There are two examples. One is “Heat Air Expands.” When you boil an egg and sometimes heat causes the egg shell to crack. Then you can use a pin to make a small hole into the bottom of the egg that give air a way to escape. In that way, your egg won’t be cracked.
The other is you can put onions in the refrigerator before you cut them, because onions carry a kind of compounds that will make you shed tears. And in the case of the onion, you can prevent yourself from shedding too much tears
You can tell science in the kitchen to your mom or maybe your cook and they will love you more.

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Chris 提到...

Hi Dora,

I still did not get your PP and TX.